Revising the Script! (Planning)

 Context

SO! Good news, on 2/17/26, me and my partner officially got our production greenlit and ready to begin filming. 

However, there was some issues we had with our script. First one being that it had wrapped up too much, and felt more like a short two minute film rather than the two minute opening to a two hour long film. Another was when it was set! Which I will elaborate further on in this blog.

Revising the Ending

I was given the suggestion to either make the first scene longer, to where it ended before the script did, or shorten the script and add in a second scene (even if it was for ten seconds). I decided to do the latter.

First Draft Ending (Same image from the Scripting blog)

In my blog about making the script, I mentioned that it (the first draft) was supposed to end with the main character finding another date, but that, too, seemed way too finished/concluded so I decided against that idea. 

Old + Revised

Old Version

2nd Revise

In the end, the two minutes is set to end around the middle of Lucille's conversation on the phone. I extended the dialogue, incase time permitted. 

Changing the time period

After I realized how difficult it would be with trying to convince the audience it was set in the 80s-90s... me and my partner decided to move over to present time. That way, it makes the process easier, and our message/theme can still be shown. 

With this, we also had to change the dialogue (+the characters are now the same age as the actors).

I wanted to show their personality while trying to make it seem realistic enough.